Class Work
1. You will be inviting three classmates to read and respond to your draft. Be sure it is showing on your computer screen or have a paper copy.
Peer Editing Video: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=24apK7i32xg
Now it is your turn.
This is the peer editing sheet. You will be given a paper copy.
Author:
______________________________
Editor #1:
____________________________ Editor #2:
_____________________
Editor #3:
______________________
Editor #1:
Do you, the reader,
understand the definition? Why or why not?
Pick out your favorite example
and note it here. What made it strong? Why was it interesting?
Ask questions and give
suggestions: What else needs to be said?
What else do you, the reader, need to know? (“Nothing” is not what you want to
say here!)
Is the definition accurate? Explain.
Editor
#2
How is the paper
organized? Did it flow smoothly from beginning to end? Did the introduction
capture your attention? Was the conclusion strong and memorable? Explain these
points. Use the back if necessary.
What information did the
author provide to clarify the definition such as dictionary definition;
classmate definition, example from history, art, or music; quotation; example
from the news; etc. Explain.
Did the author organize paragraphs, use clear and correct
sentences, and select appropriate words? Explain.
Editor #3
You are the editor.
Check for GUM. (Grammar/Usage/Mechanics)
Especially be on the lookout for run-on sentences, fragments, and comma
splices. Note unusual sentence structure. Don’t
be afraid to write on the draft or to make comments on the electronic copy. (There is an editing feature in CANVAS and in Word.
Use the yellow sticky note provided to write your major goals for revision - up to three. We will be sharing.
2. Quick Write - Topic: Fear and/or Halloween
What frightens you? What frightens others: spiders, big dogs, scorpions, snakes, getting lost, the dark...?
Think of a time you or someone you know was frightened. Talk about the event at your table.
Now, take up to 15 minutes to share the story on paper.
3. A review of how to
punctuate titles! https://www.thoughtco.com/punctuating-titles-1857242
4. Writing
introductions: http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/intros.htm
http://www.butte.edu/departments/cas/tipsheets/style_purpose_strategy/intro_conclusions.html
Homework: Revise your definition draft. Refer to your peer editing sheet and to your goal sheet to guide your revisions. Also, revise your introduction and your conclusion as needed. You want to capture the attention of the reader. You also want a clear ending that shows the reader the true meaning of the word or term.
